One Day, Part 2, page 7
on August 26, 2013 at 12:01 amRegardless of what you think of the content, man, I really think this story could have used an extra page or something here. Ruth sneaks out while Ryan is asleep? Man, do teenagers tucker out after sex? Seriously, Young David, what? If anything, Ryan should be running off, making excuses. Then that should be what causes Ruth to second-guess herself, not some weird ethereal hanky panky trauma. But this was… more expedient, I guess? If no one has to talk, I can get on to the next event!
This story needs more room to breathe. It just goes wham-bam-wham-bam-wham-bam. I was in too much in a rush.
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